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Waiting is good for people. However, too much waiting only makes people hard. Waiting is something everyone should learn. People teach babies to wait, and people also teach pets to wait. Waiting is polite and correct. But waiting too long wears out both humans and animals. Because there is no reward and time is wasted. So waiting is sometimes good and sometimes not good. Life is a series of waiting.

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Hello, Sheila! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next class! :)

~ Teacher Tricia


Waiting is good for people. 
>>> CORRECT!

However, too much waiting only makes people hard. Waiting is something everyone should learn. 
>>> CORRECT!

People teach babies to wait, and people also teach pets to wait. 
>>> CORRECT!

Waiting is polite and correct. But waiting too long wears out both humans and animals. 
>>> CORRECT!

Because there is no reward and time is wasted. 
>>> Because there is no reward and time are wasted. 

So waiting is sometimes good and sometimes not good. 
>>> CORRECT!

Life is a series of waiting.
>>> CORRECT!
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