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My favorite food

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I like Italian food so much.
Pasta is one of my favorite Italian food.
When I have lunch or dinner with my family or friends, I alwalys go to Italian restuarant.
My older sister likes Italian food too, So she makes pasta for me.
I want to go to Italy and eat pasta and pizza in Italy.
When I feel upset or sad, Eating delicious Italian food makes me good condition.
Someday, I will try to make pasta by myself.

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Hello Min Sol!
Reading your composition made me very hungry haha. Thanks for spending time and effort in writing this. Please do be careful of simple spelling and punctuation mistakes. Keep up the good work! ^^
~~Teacher Kate 

I like Italian food so much.
>>CORRECT!
Pasta is one of my favorite Italian food.
>>CORRECT!
When I have lunch or dinner with my family or friends, I alwalys go to Italian restuarant.
>>When I have lunch or dinner with my family or friends, I always go to an Italian restaurant.
My older sister likes Italian food too, So she makes pasta for me.
>>My older sister likes Italian food too so she makes pasta for me.
I want to go to Italy and eat pasta and pizza in Italy.
>>I want to go to Italy and eat pasta and pizza there. 
When I feel upset or sad, Eating delicious Italian food makes me good condition.
>>When I feel upset or sad, eating delicious Italian food makes me feel better.
Someday, I will try to make pasta by myself.
>>CORRECT!
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