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Actually I don¡¯t like to study
When they have study and work at that time it will be very hard

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Hi Henry, 
Studying while working gives you the confidence you need as you have financial control as a student. You will become a more responsible and disciplined person, more self-confident, and learn to spend money more carefully and wisely. However, the disadvantages are that the student sacrifices their time for their studies and they may experience stress and exhaustion. And it also requires self-discipline and exceptional time management skills. ~ Teacher QUENNY..

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Actually I don¡¯t like to study
>> I dislike studying because it's difficult, tiring, and not interesting for me. 
When they have study and work at that time it will be very hard
>>It's not easy to study and work at the same time and it's exhausting because you need to do many things aside from studying. 
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