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This was quite a funny story, Andrew! ヾ(£À¡Òー¡Ò£À)«Î The smell of the cooked fish drew the attention of a lot of animals and you ate with them. :D It was very creative of you to add that situation to something as normal as cooking. Great job! (¡Ü¢§¢£¢§¡Ü) As for my suggestion, I would recommend you give some examples of the animals that entered your house, so the readers will have an idea. Are some of them cats? dogs? rabbits? pigs? Something like that. :) Thank you!
~T.Harmony <3

My parants and I cook a fish today.
>> My parents and I cooked a fish today. (Take note of the spelling of "parents" ^^)
Mom teaches me how to cook a fish.
>> My mom taught me how to cook a fish. (NOTE: We use "taught" because it's finished. ^^)
When we finished cooking, many animals was in our house!
>> When we finished cooking, many animals were in our house! 
OR>> When we finished cooking, a lot of animals entered our house!
Animals and we share our food.
>> We shared our food with the animals.
It was very yummy!
>> CORRECT!
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