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~T.Harmony <3

My parants and I cook a fish today.
>> My parents and I cooked a fish today. (Take note of the spelling of "parents" ^^)
Mom teaches me how to cook a fish.
>> My mom taught me how to cook a fish. (NOTE: We use "taught" because it's finished. ^^)
When we finished cooking, many animals was in our house!
>> When we finished cooking, many animals were in our house! 
OR>> When we finished cooking, a lot of animals entered our house!
Animals and we share our food.
>> We shared our food with the animals.
It was very yummy!
>> CORRECT!
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