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When I think about hobbies, only sports are thought of my brain. I consider that 'golf' is an expensive hobby for almost people. To play golf, everyone has to buy gloves, golf clubs, shoes and something else. And they have to be lessoned about golf. So older people are inclined to play golf than younger people. But golf is a sport that so many people like to. Not for only men or only women.
I think that people wants to get an inexpensive hobby, they should spend time outside. Because if they have an inside hobby, they must pay for borrowing a place maybe.

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Hi Gem.  I appreciate your opinion regarding this issue. ^_^
T. Irene
When I think about hobbies, only sports are thought of my brain. 
>>> When I think about hobbies, I can only remember sports. 
I consider that 'golf' is an expensive hobby for almost people. 
>>> I consider 'golf' an expensive hobby for most people.
To play golf, everyone has to buy gloves, golf clubs, shoes and something else. 
>>> Correct. 
OR
>>> To play golf, everyone has to buy gloves, golf clubs, shoes, and other things. 
And they have to be lessoned about golf. 
>>> They also need to take golf lessons. 
So older people are inclined to play golf than younger people. 
>>> Older people have more ability to earn money than younger people so they are more inclined to play golf. 
But golf is a sport that so many people like to. 
>>> But golf is a sport that so many people like to do. 
Not for only men or only women.
>>> It's not gender-related.
I think that people wants to get an inexpensive hobby, they should spend time outside. Because if they have an inside hobby, they must pay for borrowing a place maybe.
>>> I think that if people want to have an inexpensive hobby, they should choose outdoor activities which are cheaper than indoor ones. 
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