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What is the standard of living like in your country?

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Since the Korean War, Korea has emerged as one of the more politically and economically free nations in the world. Economy has been growing continuously . There are some facts about living conditions here in Korea. First of all, the best thing we are proud of is clean and modern public transportation. Many foreigners give complements on the subway system. Secondly, the crime rate is much lower than other countries. It is normal practice for Korean to leave their possetions on the table at the cafes or restaurants to make sure their seats. We are not amazed it, but many people from the world are shocked because it can't be happened in their countries. Thirdly, we have universal Healthcare system. It was first introduced in 1989. This may be a key factor in the increase in life expectancy in Korea. We also created plans to help our citizens treat certain forms of dementia as part of the plan to solve aging society. However, there are many problems we need to solve like high suicide rate,

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Good day, Sir Hwang!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
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Since the Korean War, Korea has emerged as one of the more politically and economically free nations in the world. 
>> CORRECT!
Economy has been growing continuously . 
>> CORRECT!
There are some facts about living conditions here in Korea. 
>> CORRECT!
First of all, the best thing we are proud of is clean and modern public transportation. 
>> CORRECT!
Many foreigners give complements on the subway system. 
>> CORRECT!
Secondly, the crime rate is much lower than other countries. 
>> CORRECT!
It is normal practice for Korean to leave their possetions on the table at the cafes or restaurants to make sure their seats. 
>> It is a normal practice for Koreans to leave their possessions on the table at the cafes or restaurants to secure their seats. 
We are not amazed it, but many people from the world are shocked because it can't be happened in their countries. 
>> We are not amazed by it, but many people from the world are shocked because it can't happen in their countries. 
Thirdly, we have universal Healthcare system. 
>> CORRECT!
It was first introduced in 1989. 
>> CORRECT!
This may be a key factor in the increase in life expectancy in Korea. 
>> CORRECT!
We also created plans to help our citizens treat certain forms of dementia as part of the plan to solve aging society. 
>> CORRECT!
However, there are many problems we need to solve like high suicide rate,
>> However, there are many problems we need to solve like high suicide rate, low fertility rate, and others.

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