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what is the most stressful or traumatizing situation you\'ve ever been in?

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To be honestly, the most stressful and traumatizing situation is when I'm in my place. Besides an Alzheimer, my grandmom is a type of person who is conservative, jealous and greedy. She tends to say that "Why are you late?" , "Did you make a living?", "Why is your husband late?" and etc to my mom. In addition to that, my daddy is not for my mom side. He always says about an Alzheimer of her. I know when I leave this home, I don't care about it. But I don't want to it's gonna over like this.

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Happy Monday to you, Elic! Education is the most powerful weapon, which you can use to change the world. Great things are done by a series of small things brought together. You get the best out of others when you give the best of yourself. 

To be honestly, the most stressful and traumatizing situation is when I'm in my place.
>> To be honest, the most stressful and traumatizing situation I've been is whenever I'm home.
Besides an Alzheimer, my grandmom is a type of person who is conservative, jealous and greedy.
>> Besides my grandmom having an Alzheimer's disease, she is also the conservative, jealous, and greedy type of person.
She tends to say that "Why are you late?" , "Did you make a living?", "Why is your husband late?" and etc. to my mom.
>> She always say these things to my mom "Why are you late?" , "Did you make a living?" , "Why is your husband late?" , and etc.
In addition to that, my daddy is not for my mom side.
>>In addition to that, unfortunately my dad is not on my mom's side.
He always says about an Alzheimer of her.
>> He always try to make the Alzheimer's disease his excuse for his mom.
I know when I leave this home, I don't care about it.
>> I wouldn't really care if I leave my home.
But I don't want to it's gonna over like this.
>> Because I don't want to live my life this way.

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