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November, 2022 is the most memorable weekend that I have had. That day was in military vacation. My close friends came to my home without talking. They picked me up and started to go one of the Incheon islands. We ate a bunch of foods and watched a seashore. I¡¯ve never experienced this marvelous and sudden trip. So I remember the trip of that time.

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Hi, Robin!
Reading what you wrote is actually taking me back to my high school days when we go on unplanned trips. These moments are really priceless and unforgettable.
- T. Caitlyn
November, 2022 is the most memorable weekend that I have had. 
>> The most memorable weekend that I had was last November 2022.
That day was in military vacation. 
>> I was on a military vacation that day.
My close friends came to my home without talking. 
>> My close friends came to my house unannounced.
They picked me up and started to go one of the Incheon islands. 
>> They picked me up and we went to one of the islands in Incheon. 
We ate a bunch of foods and watched a seashore. 
>> We ate a bunch of food and watched at the seashore. 
I¡¯ve never experienced this marvelous and sudden trip. 
>> CORRECT
So I remember the trip of that time.
>> So I can really remember our trip at that time.
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