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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Has your country experienced much war in the past?
Who were the most famous people in your country's history?


Geographically, Korea had many wars since ancient times.
There were many wars during the Joseon Dynasty( the Joseon Dynasty is the name of the
country before Korea).
There were japanese colonial times and the Korean War.
Today, I talk about General LEE Soon_Shin of the Joseon Dynasty person.
He fight 11 wars in the sea with japan, which invaded Joseon.
He was killed his last battle.
He is highly regarded in modern Korea, and If you go to Gwanghwamun Square in Seoul,
A large statue of him is statue of King Sejong(He mad korean language),
and his face is on 100 won( Korean coin) it's draw.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Has your country experienced much war in the past?
Who were the most famous people in your country's history?



Geographically, Korea had many wars since ancient times.
>>  Geographically, Korea had many wars in the ancient times.
There were many wars during the Joseon Dynasty( the Joseon Dynasty is the name of the
country before Korea).
>> CORRECT!
There were japanese colonial times and the Korean War.
>> There were the Japanese colonial times and the Korean War.
Today, I talk about General LEE Soon_Shin of the Joseon Dynasty person.
>> Today, I talk about General Lee Soon Shin, a famous person in the Joseon Dynasty.
He fight 11 wars in the sea with japan, which invaded Joseon.
>> He fought 11 wars in the sea with Japan, which invaded Joseon.
He was killed his last battle.
>>  He was killed in his last battle.
He is highly regarded in modern Korea, and If you go to Gwanghwamun Square in Seoul,
A large statue of him is statue of King Sejong(He mad korean language),
and his face is on 100 won( Korean coin) it's draw.
>> He is highly regarded in modern Korea; and if you go to Gwanghwamun Square in Seoul, a large statue of him is built with the statue of King Sejong (who made the Korean language), and his face is on 100 won( Korean coin).
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