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How different are hobbies now from hobbies in the past?

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Hobbies have evolved and changed over time, reflecting changes in technology, social norms, and lifestyle choices.

1. Technology: With the advent of technology, there are now many new hobbies that involve using electronic devices such as smartphones, and computers.

2. Accessibility: As people's lifestyles have become busier, hobbies have become more accessible and convenient. For instance, people can now participate in online classes and workshops.

3. Globalization: Due to globalization, people are now exposed to a wider range of hobbies and interests from different cultures around the world. This has led to the popularity of hobbies such as yoga, meditation, and martial arts, which have their origins in other parts of the world.

4. Social changes: Hobbies have also changed as social norms have evolved. For example, in the past, certain hobbies were seen as gender-specific, such as sewing for women. Today, people are encouraged to pursue their interests regardless of gender.

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Hobbies have evolved and changed over time, reflecting changes in technology, social norms, and lifestyle choices.
>> Correct
1. Technology: With the advent of technology, there are now many new hobbies that involve using electronic devices such as smartphones, and computers.
>> Correct
2. Accessibility: As people's lifestyles have become busier, hobbies have become more accessible and convenient. 
>> Correct
For instance, people can now participate in online classes and workshops.
>> Correct
3. Globalization: Due to globalization, people are now exposed to a wider range of hobbies and interests from different cultures around the world. 
>> Correct
This has led to the popularity of hobbies such as yoga, meditation, and martial arts, which have their origins in other parts of the world.
>> Correct
4. Social changes: Hobbies have also changed as social norms have evolved. 
>> Correct
For example, in the past, certain hobbies were seen as gender-specific, such as sewing for women. 
>> Correct
Today, people are encouraged to pursue their interests regardless of gender.
>> Correct
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