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The changes happening in my country.

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These days various charge are rising about
25% in my country.
Many people complain that they are hard to live.
But Many people go abroad and
some people enjoy living in Seoul for 7days.
The cost of them are over 3000$.
Young people were doing golf although they don¡¯t have a lot of money.
It was serious in my country.

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Good morning, Ms. Sunny!
That is one thing that we do not understand. Prices are going up, and people complain but they do not change their lifestyles. Some people are not affected by inflation because they are rich. 
Thank you for sharing your thought and observations. :) 
See you!
Aki~
These days various charge are rising about 25% in my country.
>>>  These days various charges are rising by about 25% in my country.

Many people complain that they are hard to live.
>>> Many people complain that they are having a hard time living their lives.

But Many people go abroad and some people enjoy living in Seoul for 7days.
>>> But many people go abroad and some people enjoy living in Seoul for 7 days.
>>> But many people go abroad and some people travel to Seoul for 7 days.

The cost of them are over 3000$.
>>> The cost is over $3000.

Young people were doing golf although they don¡¯t have a lot of money.
>>> Young people were playing golf although they don¡¯t have a lot of money.

It was serious in my country.
>>> It is serious in my country.
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