¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

My opinion regarding bullying

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±è*Áö
2023-02-27 633

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

I don't think that we can classify people regarding likely being bullied. No matter what, we should not find reasons from victims. Therefore, I'd like to talk about perpetrators.
There are some people who more likely to bully others. They tend to not care about the future, and other classmates. The reason for bullying is absence of sanctions on their behavior. In my opinion, the terms for perpetrator's parents are also necessary. Teenagers should be protected, and be guided from adults, so the action increasing efforts on preventing school bullying must be executed. For example, the group program for increasing membership among classmate, or enhancing education for teachers who charge in managing class could be helpful.
Educating Teenagers is same as guiding one being towards member of society. To make society to better place, we should focus on making school to peaceful environment for our future.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Thank you so much for this Scarlet. You're right, the perpetrators are the problems in cases of bullying.

I don't think that we can classify people regarding likely being bullied. 
>>>> OR: I don't think that we can classify people as being likely to be bullied.   
No matter what, we should not find reasons from victims. 
>>>> correct 
Therefore, I'd like to talk about perpetrators.
>>>>  correct 
There are some people who more likely to bully others. 
>>>There are some people who are more likely to bully others.  
They tend to not care about the future, and other classmates. 
>>>>   correct 
The reason for bullying is absence of sanctions on their behavior. 
>>>>  correct   
In my opinion, the terms for perpetrator's parents are also necessary. 
>>>>  correct  
Teenagers should be protected, and be guided from adults, so the action increasing efforts on preventing school bullying must be executed. 
>>>>  Teenagers should be protected and be guided by adults, so increasing efforts on preventing school bullying must be executed. 
For example, the group program for increasing membership among classmate, or enhancing education for teachers who charge in managing class could be helpful.
>>>>  For example, the group program for increasing membership among classmate, or enhancing education for teachers who are in charge of managing class could be helpful.
Educating Teenagers is same as guiding one being towards member of society. 
>>>>   correct
To make society to better place, we should focus on making school to peaceful environment for our future.
>>>>  To make society a better place, we should focus on making school to be a peaceful environment for our future.
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
124614 Bird Beak! ±è*À² ¿Ï·á 2023-01-04 592
124613 3.Jan.2023 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-04 2
124612 What do you like best about staying at home? ±¸*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-01-04 1129
124611 Which school subject do you like the most? ÀÓ*È£ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-04 491
124610 What¡¯s new with you? ±è*´Ô ¿Ï·á 2023-01-04 461
124609 Homework ¿À*ºó ¿Ï·á 2023-01-04 2
124608 about COVID-19 ÃÖ*³ª ¿Ï·á 2023-01-03 583
124607 If you could buy only one of these two things, would you choose... ¾ç*Àº ¿Ï·á 2023-01-03 780
124606 Homework ÀÌ*°æ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-03 580
124605 my biggest goal. ¹Ú*º° ¿Ï·á 2023-01-03 594
124604 homework ¹Ú*°æ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-03 592
124603 homework ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-03 583
124602 homework ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-03 597
124601 homework ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-03 598
124600 Choosing correct verb ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-03 537
124599 What savings goals do you have? ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-03 649
124598 When was the last time you went shopping? ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-03 2858
124597 What will the city of the future look like? ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-03 684
124596 Do you or would you encourage your children to watch Disney... ÅÂ*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2023-01-03 516
124595 homework ¹Ú*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2023-01-03 4

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04