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If I had a chance and an ability to change one thing in our culture, I would change our college entrance exam system. The Korean SAT is so extremely difficult that many students don't get good results and most of them get much stress and pressure. Also the exam force mainly on three or four subjects such as math and English. So most of students study only the subjects. They ignore the other subjects which are needed to be a good citizen.

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If I had a chance and an ability to change one thing in our culture, I would change our college entrance exam system. 
>> Correct!
The Korean SAT is so extremely difficult that many students don't get good results and most of them get much stress and pressure. 
>> Correct!
Also the exam force mainly on three or four subjects such as math and English. 
>> Also, the exam focuses primarily on three or four subjects, such as mathematics and English.
So most of students study only the subjects. 
>> As a result, most students only study these subjects.
They ignore the other subjects which are needed to be a good citizen.
>> Correct!
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