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Do you think the way people look at failure plays a big part in how successful they become?

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I don¡¯t let others decide whether my life is successful or not. How terrible life it is if my life should be determined by others, not me who knows myself better than any other. I don¡¯t deny that we don¡¯t need to be conscious of others, We can be better off with the precious advice of others. What I am trying to say is that It is myself that can judge my life at the end of my life.

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Here's your edited composition, Steve.
Thanks for sending it. 

Cheers,
Jean~~



Do you think the way people look at failure plays a big part in how successful they become?

How terrible life it is if my life should be determined by others, not me who knows myself better than any other. 
>> How terrible life would be if it were determined by others, not by me who knows myself better than any other person out there.  

I don¡¯t deny that we don¡¯t need to be conscious of others, We can be better off with the precious advice of others. 
>> I don¡¯t deny the fact that I believe we don¡¯t need to be conscious of others, we can be better off without the precious advice of others. 
>> [ NOTE: The two statements are contradictory so I find it confusing. I interpreted it the way I understood it. ]

What I am trying to say is that It is myself that can judge my life at the end of my life.
>> What I am trying to say is that ultimately, I myself can judge my own life. 
>> [ NOTE: I'm not sure if I understood your statement correctly, at any rate, the above is my interpretation. ]

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