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작성자: 김*우
2023-02-22 139

회원님의 영작문

Hi.
There was a good thing today.
Do you remember what I said this morning about the blood test?
Dr. MJ and I could check the result today, and it was better than expected.
Dr. MJ had high levels about liver function test ago, however this result told that it was normal.
And I was worried about HbA1C, as you know.
It's level was 5.7 and it means a little higher level than normal.
And you know what?
I am so satisfied with the level.
Of course, I should care my blood sugar consistently.
Anyway, this test made us feel better.
During lunchtime, I met many staff of another internet company.
They tried to build the network as soon as possible.
I think they can make it until this Friday.
Meanwhile, I was so busy, not only seeing patients, but also doing administrative works for our new clinic.
I almost passed out for a moment.
After the clinic was closed, Dr. MJ and I visited some restaurant to eat raw meat.
After that, I enjoyed driving my car, of course, being opened the roof.
See you soon.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good morning, Dr. Kim!

As a doctor, you know so well the consequences of your food intake and their effects to your health. If you do not want to be ill, then you would better take the test early and try to avoid getting sick. Now that the test revealed the truth about your blood sugar level, you can prepare to stop diabetes or other related diseases. Meanwhile, Dr. MJ has to love his liver too. Both your health matter the most for your families and to be able to pay all your obligations to the banks.

What a relief to have a new Internet company accommodate your request! I feel sorry about LG because you have been a very good client for a long time and they did not addess your transfer installation needs. What a shame! They say, some other people's loss is other people's gain. I hope that Korea Telecom will serve you well in your new clinic.

As you have been so busy, pause, eat, and work again. Repeat. It may be good to soothe yourselves every once in a while. You have not mentioned drinking whiskey last night. So, keep up the good work in maintaining your health.

My suggestions are so few. Correct preposition, the capitalizatin of 'Internet' as a proper noun, and the right verb form are some of them. Please read them well. Over all, you did a wonderful job for the rest of the sentences!

I will see you again in class then.

-T. Donna~

Hi.
>> Correct!

There was a good thing today.
>> Correct!

Do you remember what I said this morning about the blood test?
>> Correct!

Dr. MJ and I could check the result today, and it was better than expected.
>> Correct!

Dr. MJ had high levels about liver function test ago, however this result told that it was normal.
>> Dr. MJ had high levels of liver function test before, however, this result said that it was normal.

And I was worried about HbA1C, as you know.
>> Correct!

It's level was 5.7 and it means a little higher level than normal.
>>  Correct!

And you know what?
>> Correct!

I am so satisfied with the level.
>> Correct!

Of course, I should care my blood sugar consistently.
>> Of course, I should care for my blood sugar consistently.

Anyway, this test made us feel better.
>> Correct!

During lunchtime, I met many staff of another internet company.
>> During lunchtime, I met many staff of the other Internet company.
 
They tried to build the network as soon as possible.
>> Correct!

I think they can make it until this Friday.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile, I was so busy, not only seeing patients, but also doing administrative works for our new clinic.
>> Correct!

I almost passed out for a moment.
>> Correct!

After the clinic was closed, Dr. MJ and I visited some restaurant to eat raw meat.
>> Correct!

After that, I enjoyed driving my car, of course, being opened the roof.
>> After that, I enjoyed driving my car, of course, opening the roof.

See you soon.
>> Correct!
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