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Korean tourism industry

작성자: 김*경
2023-02-20 462

회원님의 영작문

I'd like to write an essay about Korean tourism which of the topics we talked about.
The Korean government has been working to promote the tourism industry through various initiatives, including the creation of new tourist attractions and the expansion of existing ones. They have also been working to increase the number of international flights to Korea, as well as to simplify the visa application process for tourists.

In addition to these efforts, the Korean government has also been working to promote "Hallyu" or the Korean Wave, which refers to the global popularity of Korean pop culture, such as K-pop music, Korean dramas, and Korean movies. The popularity of Hallyu has led to an increase in the number of tourists visiting Korea to experience Korean pop culture firsthand.

Overall, the Korean tourism industry is an important sector of the economy, and the government is actively working to promote it and attract more visitors to the country.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Here's your edited composition, Steve. 
I appreciate your sending it. See you later!

Cheers,
Jean~~



I'd like to write an essay about Korean tourism which of the topics we talked about.
>> OR: Allow me to write a composition on Korean tourism, which was one of the topics we talked about. 

The Korean government has been working to promote the tourism industry through various initiatives, including the creation of new tourist attractions and the expansion of existing ones. 
>> OR: The Korean government has been striving to take the travel industry to the next level through various initiatives, including the creation of new tourist attractions and the expansion of existing ones.

They have also been working to increase the number of international flights to Korea, as well as to simplify the visa application process for tourists.
>> OR: On top of that, increasing the number of international flights to Korea, as well as expediting the visa application process for tourists have been gaining ground. 

In addition to these efforts, the Korean government has also been working to promote "Hallyu" or the Korean Wave, which refers to the global popularity of Korean pop culture, such as K-pop music, Korean dramas, and Korean movies.
>> OR: Along with the mentioned measures, the Korean leadership has been making strides in promoting "Hallyu" or the Korean Wave, which refers to the global popularity of Korean pop culture, such as K-pop music, Korean dramas, and Korean movies.

 The popularity of Hallyu has led to an increase in the number of tourists visiting Korea to experience Korean pop culture firsthand.
>> OR: The Hallyu boom is seen as a precursor to the rise in the number of international visits. 

Overall, the Korean tourism industry is an important sector of the economy, and the government is actively working to promote it and attract more visitors to the country.
>> OR: To a large extent, the booming Korean touristry has become a leading economic sector and the governtment is actively working to stimulate and boost it to make the country a natural draw for international visitors. 


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