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What do you think about taking a nap? How about sleeping in?

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I think taking a nap is good to us. Taking nap has a lot of advantages. Taking nap improves our memory and learning skills. And,napping reduces stress and improves mental health. Naps help improve our health. Getting enough rest strengthens our immune system and helps prevent diseases. So, we should take a nap if we can take.

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Hello,Seon U! 
Great point! You did well in writing your homework. Keep it up!
With that said, I think I will sleep more! Kidding aside. 
-T.Jhozel 
I think taking a nap is good to us. 
>>  I think that taking a nap is helpful to us.
Taking nap has a lot of advantages. 
>> Correct!
Taking nap improves our memory and learning skills. 
>> Taking a nap improves our memory and learning abilities. 
And,napping reduces stress and improves mental health. 
>> Furthermore, napping reduces stress and improves mental health.
Naps help improve our health. 
>>  Napping is beneficial to our health.
Getting enough rest strengthens our immune system and helps prevent diseases. 
>> Correct!
So, we should take a nap if we can take.
>>  So, if possible, we should take a nap.
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