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What realistic changes would you make to your country\'s attitude toward education?

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I think we shouldn't let young children study too much. That can make to reduce their interest about studying. In fact, many children are devoted to studying in Korea. And they get tired when they really have to study. That makes a bad result. In my opinion, studying steadily is the most effective.

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Hello, Seon U!
Anyways, thank you for taking the time to do your homework. :D
True, excessive studying can be exhausting as well! So try not to overwork yourself.
See you on Thursday! 
-T.Jhozel 
I think we shouldn't let young children study too much. 
>> I think that young children should not be over studied.
That can make to reduce their interest about studying. 
>> This can cause them to lose interest in studying.
In fact, many children are devoted to studying in Korea. 
>> In fact, many children in Korea are dedicated to their studies.
And they get tired when they really have to study. 
>> And they get tired when they have to study for a long time.
That makes a bad result. In my opinion, studying steadily is the most effective.
>>That produces a negative outcome. Consistent study, in my opinion, is the most effective.
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