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Do you think it is possible for a cold hearted person to change?

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Of course, I believe it's possible if I have someone who is precious to me. But I think it's pretty hard that someone would make me thinking a person as important. Also it takes some time, and should be more patient.

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Amazing Monday, Elic! The beautiful thing about learning is that no one can take it away from you. You don't have to be great to start, but you have to start to be great.

Of course, I believe it's possible if I have someone who is precious to me.
>> Of course, I believe it is possible for a cold hearted person to change especially if that person is precious to me.
But I think it's pretty hard that someone would make me thinking a person as important.
>> But I think it's pretty hard for me to let the person know he/she is important to me.
Also it takes some time, and should be more patient.
>> It also takes a lot of time to do that so, I have to be really patient.
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