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How do you practice long patience?

작성자: 류*선
2023-02-17 145

회원님의 영작문

In my case, I try to make a goal. It's hard to have patience without goals. Every day I make a to-do list. These are my small goals every day to grow my patience. It makes me help to manage my time and energy well. When I did them, I felt achieved. However, the process isn't easy. achievement is followed by struggle and stress. I can say that I'm a person who doesn't have much patience. Especially, when I don't like to work on something, I feel frustrated and exhausted. Hence, I've given up many goals in the past. When I couldn't approach my goals, I was very disappointed. I lost my confidence a lot. After failing, I tried to check and analyze the details of my goals. I just wanted to know what is the problem with couldn't approaching my goals. If I don't know myself well, it's hard to discover what is available potential to approach the goal. So, I tried to check my time and energy that can do my small goals in my life. It is more important to set achievable goals than many goals. :)

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Precisely, Jane! Our goals should be feasible for us to be successful. it is not about the quantity that matters, but it is the quality.-Faith-
In my case, I try to make a goal. 
>> CORRECT
It's hard to have patience without goals. 
>> CORRECT
Every day I make a to-do list. 
>> Every day, I make a to-do list.
These are my small goals every day to grow my patience. 
>> CORRECT
It makes me help to manage my time and energy well. 
>> It helps me manage my time and energy well. 
When I did them, I felt achieved. 
>> CORRECT
However, the process isn't easy. 
>> CORRECT
achievement is followed by struggle and stress. 
>> Achievement is followed by struggle and stress. 
I can say that I'm a person who doesn't have much patience. 
>> CORRECT
OR Unfortunately, I know myself that I can be impatient. 
Especially, when I don't like to work on something, I feel frustrated and exhausted. 
>> CORRECT
Hence, I've given up many goals in the past. 
>> CORRECT
OR Hence, I have given up many goals in the past. 
When I couldn't approach my goals, I was very disappointed. 
>> CORRECT
I lost my confidence a lot. 
>> CORRECT
After failing, I tried to check and analyze the details of my goals. 
>> CORRECT
I just wanted to know what is the problem with couldn't approaching my goals. 
>> I just wanted to know the problem why I could not approach my goals. 
If I don't know myself well, it's hard to discover what is available potential to approach the goal. 
>> If I did not know myself well, it would be hard to discover what the available potential is to approach my goal. 
So, I tried to check my time and energy that can do my small goals in my life. 
>> Therefore, I tried to check my time and energy that can help me do my small goals in life. 
It is more important to set achievable goals than many goals. :)
>> It is more important to set achievable goals than setting many goals. :)
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