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Is it okay for middle schoolers to have jobs like babysitting or mowing lawns? Why or why not?

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No, It's because I don't think it is unfair to all of the middle schoolers. This period is very important because we have to study, get along with friends, families and so on. But some middle schoolers are poor so if they have to earn a money. Like this cases have to get a benefit from their country government for they get dream of future and to be a positive.

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Hi, Daisy. :)
Happy Friday to you! ^^
Thank you for writing an essay about this matter. 
I sometimes feel bad that some children have to work so they can go to school. It shouldn't be that way. If they have to work, it should be because they need to learn life skills that will help them be better people in the future. Anyhow, that is my opinion about it. 
I hope you're having a great day. See you in class later. ^^
~Teacher Charry

No, It's because I don't think it is unfair to all of the middle schoolers. 
>> No, it's not because I don't think it is fair to all of the middle schoolers.
This period is very important because we have to study, get along with friends, families and so on. 
>> CORRECT!
But some middle schoolers are poor so if they have to earn a money. 
>> But some middle schoolers are poor so they have to do it to earn money. 
Like this cases have to get a benefit from their country government for they get dream of future and to be a positive.
>> [Do you mean]: In these cases, they have to get benefit from their countries' government for them to fulfill their dreams and have brighter future. 
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