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Which one do you think is better, being rich or being beautiful? Why?

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I will choose being rich. It's because being beautiful is doesn't need to me. I am satisfying with my appearance so I want to choose being rich. If I choose being beautiful, I just get superficial benefit eventually I have to study and get a job. So being beautiful doesn't have mean. But if I choose being rich, I can live in good house and live happy. Also I can do anything if I want to do something.

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Hi, Daisy! ^^
Thank you for answering this question. 
I agree that being rich is better. Simply because being beautiful is not everything. 
However, if you have money, you can make other things that will truly make you feel happy. 
Anyhow, I hope you're having a great day. 
See you in class later. :)
~Teacher Charry

I will choose being rich. 
>> CORRECT!
It's because being beautiful is doesn't need to me. 
>> It's because being beautiful is not a need for me. 
I am satisfying with my appearance so I want to choose being rich. 
>> I am satisfied with my appearance so I want to choose being rich.
If I choose being beautiful, I just get superficial benefit eventually I have to study and get a job. 
>> If I choose being beautiful, I will just get superficial benefit from it and will eventually have to study and get a job. 
So being beautiful doesn't have mean. 
>> So, being beautiful doesn't have meaning. 
But if I choose being rich, I can live in good house and live happy. 
>> But if I choose being rich, I can live in a good house and live happily. 
Also I can do anything if I want to do something.
>> Also, I can do anything if I want to do something.
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