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Hello, T.Donna.
Actually, I am drunken now.
There is a problem.
These days, I drank whiskey everyday for some excuse.
Because I have been tired everyday, I needed whiskey.
Can you understand me?
Anyway, I couldn't help but open my car's roof today.
I took a lot of work recently, so I needed a refreshing.
Today, our oldest staff who is older than me about 12 years said, "Dr. Kim, you should take a rest. you seem so tired."
In fact, I am full of pressure.
That's why I opened the roof of my car and drank whiskey as well.
There's been a change in our clinic.
There were more clients and patients everyday.
In addition, because the moving day is coming, we should do many administrative work.
I am running out of energy quickly.
Fortunately, my family and my staff are stable lately.
After moving to new clinic, I will talk to my patients more confident.
That's because I will be very proud of my new clinic with the beautiful interior.
Of course, I have to work with my best.
Catch you soon.

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Good noon, Dr. Kim!

Whether you are drunk or not, I think you are showing a very good consistency in writing your composition. So, thank you once again for sharing all the updates and the latest happenings in your clinic and your upcoming transfer.

As I shared in class, I also had my share of toxic moments of mixing hard work, alcohol, not to mention messed up relationships in the past. But then, finding the boundary and balance (according to Beyoncé Knowles) is the key to a better and happier life. So, I understand you totally. However, moderate drinking is still recommended in your case. Be careful in opening your car's roof. You may have a few hair left. ^^ I kid. Relieve yourself from stress in pleasant and enjoyable ways.

Since you are a very outgoing person and derive energy from people, spend it with the ones who make you feel loved, joyful, and appreciated. You need them as much as they need you. Then, have a blast with your beautiful little ladies and your lovely and loving wife over the weekend. 

My grammar suggestions are about correct verb tense, preposition, adverbs, among others. Kindly read and study them carefully. Thank you for the brilliance of your work and cheers to a week of hard work and success!

Happy weekend!

-T. Donna~

Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

Actually, I am drunken now.
>> Actually, I am drunk now.

There is a problem.
>> Correct!

These days, I drank whiskey everyday for some excuse.
>> Correct!

Because I have been tired everyday, I needed whiskey.
>> Correct!

Can you understand me?
>> Correct!

Anyway, I couldn't help but open my car's roof today.
>> Correct!

I took a lot of work recently, so I needed a refreshing.
>> I took a lot of work recently, so I needed a refreshing (time/ moment).

Today, our oldest staff who is older than me about 12 years said, "Dr. Kim, you should take a rest. you seem so tired."
>> Correct!
Or: 
Today, our oldest staff who is older than me for about 12 years said, "Dr. Kim, you should take a rest, you seem so tired."

In fact, I am full of pressure.
>> Correct!

That's why I opened the roof of my car and drank whiskey as well.
>> Correct!

There's been a change in our clinic.
>> Correct!

There were more clients and patients everyday.
>> Correct!

In addition, because the moving day is coming, we should do many administrative work.
>> Correct!

I am running out of energy quickly.
>> Correct!

Fortunately, my family and my staff are stable lately.
>> Correct!

After moving to new clinic, I will talk to my patients more confident.
>>After moving to the new clinic, I will talk to my patients more confidently.

That's because I will be very proud of my new clinic with the beautiful interior.
>> Correct!

Of course, I have to work with my best.
>> Correct!

Catch you soon.
>> Correct!
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