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Please answer the question:
Are there any places that you will never visit?

I hate crowed place.
There is make me one's clothes get wet with sweat and delay time.
Sometimes people push each other in small spaces the reason is
that want to go out first.
So, I hate crowed place.
Unfortunately, It's always croweded on public transportation going to school
Beacuse of that, I get tired form the morning

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

Please answer the question:
Are there any places that you will never visit?


I hate crowed place.
>> I hate crowded places.
There is make me one's clothes get wet with sweat and delay time.
>> It makes me sweat a lot, and because of that, everything is delayed at that time.
Sometimes people push each other in small spaces the reason is
>> Sometimes people push each other in small spaces, the reason is that want to go out first.
that want to go out first.
>> Sometimes people push each other in small spaces, the reason is that want to go out first.
So, I hate crowed place.
>> So, I hate crowded places.
Unfortunately, It's always croweded on public transportation going to school
>> Unfortunately, it's always crowded in public transports like subways and buses going to school.
Beacuse of that, I get tired form the morning
>> Because of that, it makes me tired in the morning.

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