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Why do you think people pursue to study abroad?

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It's because Korean education is very hard to survive now. If we cannot go to good college, we can't get any job. So many Korean people go to abroad to study. Actually, some of my friends went to abroad to study or parent's work. Now Korean education is changing every 5 years so it is very hard to follow it.

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Hi, Daisy. ^_^
Thank you for writing an essay about this topic. 
I sometimes think studying abroad is beneficial because it gives us a different perspective as compared to what we know or are used to. 
Would you like to study abroad if given the chance? 
Anyhow, I hope you're doing great. ^^ 
See you in class later. 
~Teacher Charry :)

It's because Korean education is very hard to survive now. 
>> CORRECT!
If we cannot go to good college, we can't get any job. 
>> If we cannot go to a good college, we can't get any jobs. 
So many Korean people go to abroad to study. 
>> So many Korean people go abroad to study. 
Actually, some of my friends went to abroad to study or parent's work. 
>> Actually, some of my friends went abroad to study or because of their parent's work. 
Now Korean education is changing every 5 years so it is very hard to follow it.
>> Now, Korean education is changing every 5 years so it is very hard to follow it.
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