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Hello.
Are you enjoying your weekend?
I am literally middle of taking a rest all this weekend.
I didn't anything, but only sleep and eat.
Yesterday, I drank my whiskey with chicken and raw fish.
Those foods were excellent.
I am sure that raw fish always goes well with whiskey.
I had some news about my clinic.
Last Thursday, Dr.Bae told us that he already learned from us too much, so he would not come to our clinic everyday.
And as you could expect, it was so good to us.
One more positive thing is that Dr. Bae's chief manager became more diligent and enthusiastic, so we could reduce our concerning about his upcoming clinic.
Last Saturday, I announced to our staff that our chief manger will resign next month and we'll change our worktime next month in our new clinic.
Of course, many staff were surprised and embarrassed.
About my new building, interior progress was almost done.
Dr. MJ sent me the photos, and I look forward to vising there.
I like the layout for sure.
See you tomorrow.

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Hi there, Dr. Kim!

Yes, I had a blast over the weekend. I missed telling in class that I have watched fove episodes of 'The Glory' of Song Hye Kyo and it was gripping! Anyway, it's safe to say that you had an amazing time resting and enjoying your whiskey as well. We all deserve some fun and relaxing moments after working nonstop. We need to know what activities soothe us to be able to recharge for a new week.

By now, at least, one of your issues with Dr. Bae has been resolved. Sometimes, being honest is one of the ways to deal with a sitaution. Of course, it is unfortunate that one of your important workers will leave but you have the rest of the members to stay and they matter the most. 

The photos of your new clinic are so pleasant to look at. I am sure that a patient or client who visits you there will feel comfortable taking the treatments with you and your staff. After all, a good clinic doesn't only need top class doctors lik you and Dr. M.J., you also need the best staff, and excellent facilities.

Therefore, please take a look atthe grammar suggestions to some of your sentences below. Generally, your sentences are well- made and your ideas are very organized. Keep up the brillinat work!

See you again in class soon.

-T. Donna~

Hello.
>> Correct!

Are you enjoying your weekend?
>> Correct!

I am literally middle of taking a rest all this weekend.
>>I am literally in the middle of taking a rest all this weekend.

I didn't anything, but only sleep and eat.
>> I didn't do anything but sleep and eat.

Yesterday, I drank my whiskey with chicken and raw fish.
>> Correct!

Those foods were excellent.
>> Those food were excellent.

I am sure that raw fish always goes well with whiskey.
>> Correct!

I had some news about my clinic.
>> Correct!
Or: I have some news about my clinic.

Last Thursday, Dr.Bae told us that he already learned from us too much, so he would not come to our clinic everyday.
>> Correct!

And as you could expect, it was so good to us.
>>  And as you could expect, it was so good for us.

One more positive thing is that Dr. Bae's chief manager became more diligent and enthusiastic, so we could reduce our concerning about his upcoming clinic.
>> One more positive thing is that Dr. Bae's chief manager became more diligent and enthusiastic, so we could reduce our concerns about his upcoming clinic.

Last Saturday, I announced to our staff that our chief manger will resign next month and we'll change our worktime next month in our new clinic.
>> Correct!
Or: Last Saturday, I announced to our staff that our chief manger will resign next month and we'll change our worktime too in our new clinic.

Of course, many staff were surprised and embarrassed.
>> Correct!

About my new building, interior progress was almost done.
>> About my new building, interior progress is almost done.

Dr. MJ sent me the photos, and I look forward to vising there.
>> Dr. MJ sent me the photos, and I look forward vising there.

I like the layout for sure.
>> Correct!

See you tomorrow.
>> Correct!
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