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Making Homemade Birdfruit!!!

작성자: 김*율
2023-02-10 811

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< Making Homemade Birdfruit >

1) Get the ingredients : A jar of honey, A pack of birdseed, Ball-shaped crackers, Thin string, Tray & Bowl
2) Spill 1/3 of the birdseed on the tray. (1/3 is for less waste)
3) Pour 1/6 of the jar of honey into the bowl, and dip the ball-crackes into the honey.
4) Roll the crackers (if nessesary) until the crackers are completely coved with honey and are sticky on the outside.
5) Take out the crackers and roll it on the tray of birdseed. Then dry it (if nessesary, too).
6) Tie the string around the bird fruit (that is the cracker) and attach it to the tree you want to hang it on. It is better
if you attach it close enough to the tree so the birds woud think the birdfruit has grown originally on the tree.

# Making it is hard, but it doesn\'t have to be perfect. Just make sure the
birds enjoy their treat and don\'t grow suspicious about the treat. ^^

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good day, Heather! Thank you for sharing on how to make a handmade bird-fruit. Have you ever made one before? How was it? Let's talk more about this in class. I will see you, then. Take care! ~T. Lyn
1) Get the ingredients : A jar of honey, A pack of birdseed, Ball-shaped crackers, Thin string, Tray & Bowl
>>First, we gather the materials such as a jar of honey, a pack of bird feeds, cracker balls, a thin string, a tray, and a bowl.
2) Spill 1/3 of the birdseed on the tray. (1/3 is for less waste)
>>Then, pour only one third (1/3) of the bird seeds into the tray to reduce the waste.
3) Pour 1/6 of the jar of honey into the bowl, and dip the ball-crackes into the honey.
>>Pour one sixth (1/6) of honey into a bowl and dip the crackers in it.
4) Roll the crackers (if nessesary) until the crackers are completely coved with honey and are sticky on the outside.
>>Pour the cracker and roll it if necessary until they are completely covered in honey to make it sticky outside.
5) Take out the crackers and roll it on the tray of birdseed. 
>>Take the crackers out and roll them on the bird feeder tray.
Then dry it (if nessesary, too).
>>Then dry them as necessary.
6) Tie the string around the bird fruit (that is the cracker) and attach it to the tree you want to hang it on. 
>>Tie a string around the bird fruit, which is the cracker, and attach it to the tree where you want to hang them. 
It is better if you attach it close enough to the tree so the birds woud think the birdfruit has grown originally on the tree.
>>It is recommended to attach it close enough to the tree so that the birds would think that they are real fruits that grew on the tree.
# Making it is hard, but it doesn\'t have to be perfect. 
>>It is hard to make it but it doesn't need to be perfect.
Just make sure the birds enjoy their treat and don\'t grow suspicious about the treat.
>>Just make sure that the birds enjoy the treats and don't get suspicious about them.
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