¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Homework

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±è*¿ì
2023-02-08 432

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Hello, T. Donna.
It's almost 11 o'clock here.
As usual, I was so exhausted, and then I longed for my whiskey.
Thus, I couldn't help but drink it.
My wife stopped me drinking too much, though.
These days, I was so worried about my health.
As I said, my blood sugar went high, and I don't want to get a Diabetes.
Anyway, today, Dr. MJ and I were disappointed with Dr. Bae.
Everyone knows that we teach him with our best, but Dr. Bae didn't care about our clinic.
I suppose that he is a good man basically.
However, he joined the room suddenly while we treated our patients many times.
It's not a good manner for sure.
I am sure you know Dr. MJ now.
Dr. MJ told him that he didn't want him to come in during treatment.
I didn't tell him like that, though.
He seemed to be slow-witted about relationship.
It's so important to have a good manner.
I think that we should do something after an enough consideration.
I like Dr. MJ, because he tends to adapt new things easily.
See you tomorrow morning.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Good morning once again, Dr. Kim!

It is wonderful to hear in class that you feel very well rested in spite of your busy Wednesday. I wish you the best at work today. I realized that without weird or interesting circumstances happeing  in your clinic, you might neverhave anything new to write about. That would be boring. Nevertheless, looking at it on a positive note, your work stress, issues, etc. are a rich source of your composition topics. ^^

You have been drinking every night. With some food will be alright and not with an empty stomach. I am sure you already know this. After all, it's your simple pleasure. So, take it easy and drink in small amounts. Maybe one of the causes of your blood sugar sometimes to rise  is stress. You get stressed massively every day. Then, as a doctor, taking care of your health is not a new thing.

Dr. bae knows better now. I hope he did not cross the line today otherwide, Dr. MJ will explode. Well, you are there to control the situation. He might be curious on how young docrors perform their procedures. Well, soon, you have o leave and he will take over. We wish him all the best.

Here on your composition, I suggested some grammatical pointers as well as alternate sentences to make your sentences more efficient. Please read and analyze them carefully. I admire your ability to use new expressions each time. Use more next. Excellent piece of writing!

Keep calm, take care.

-T. Donna~ 

Hello, T. Donna.
>> Correct!

It's almost 11 o'clock here.
>> Correct!

As usual, I was so exhausted, and then I longed for my whiskey.
>> Correct!

Thus, I couldn't help but drink it.
>> Correct! Very good expressions!

My wife stopped me drinking too much, though.
>>My wife stopped me from drinking too much, though.

These days, I was so worried about my health.
>> These days, I am so worried about my health.

As I said, my blood sugar went high, and I don't want to get a Diabetes.
>> As I said, my blood sugar went high, and I don't want to get diabetes.

Anyway, today, Dr. MJ and I were disappointed with Dr. Bae.
>> Correct!

Everyone knows that we teach him with our best, but Dr. Bae didn't care about our clinic.
>> Everyone knows that we teach him the best we can, but Dr. Bae didn't care about our clinic protocols.

I suppose that he is a good man basically.
>> Correct!
Or: I suppose, he is a good man basically.

However, he joined the room suddenly while we treated our patients many times.
>> Correct!
Or: However, he joined the room suddenly many times while we treating our patients.

It's not a good manner for sure.
>> Correct!
Or: It was not supposed to be that way.

I am sure you know Dr. MJ now.
>> Correct!
Or: I am sure you know Dr. MJ by now.

Dr. MJ told him that he didn't want him to come in during treatment.
>> Dr. MJ told him that he didn't want him to come in during treatments.

I didn't tell him like that, though.
>> I didn't tell him that though.

He seemed to be slow-witted about relationship.
>> He seemed to be slow-witted about relationships.

It's so important to have a good manner.
>>It's so important to have good manners.

I think that we should do something after an enough consideration.
>> I think that we should do something after enough considerations.

I like Dr. MJ, because he tends to adapt new things easily.
>> I like Dr. MJ, because he tends to adapt with new things easily.

See you tomorrow morning.
>> Correct!
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
125629 Being a photographer¡¦ ±è*À± ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 352
125628 homework ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 2
125627 In your opinion, do miracles still happen? Why or why not? ÀÓ*À± ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 640
125626 Tuesday Homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 394
125625 Homework ±è*ȯ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 546
125624 Homework ¹Ú*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 0
125623 What kind of information are you comfortable releasing to the... Ȳ*ÇÏ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 719
125622 What do you picture yourself doing 10 years from now? ¹Ú*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 291
125621 Homework ¼Û*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 1
125620 What is your favorite all-time game? ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 342
125619 Has China sent spy balloons to your country? Share your answer... ±è*Áø ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 3
125618 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 0
125617 Best memory in the sky ±è*¾Æ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 2
125616 Have gun at home is very dangerous. ±è*¼ö ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 436
125615 Homework ÇÔ*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 1
125614 WRITING TASK: Do you think the type of vacation one takes... ¹Ú*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 299
125613 moms ±Ç*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 516
125612 Homework ¹è*Çý ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 423
125611 Which country would you NOT like to visit? Why? Àå*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 467
125610 My work environment ±Ç*ÀÏ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-14 2

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04