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Hello, T.Donna.
I was so tired.
There were a lot of works today.
I should've slept early last night.
As expected, it was so busy in the clinic today.
At lunch time, Dr. MJ and I visited our new building and checked an interior progress.
It looked almost be done.
There were not any furniture and inner design, so I couldn't be satisfied with that.
Maybe we can see the completed new clinic after one week.
This afternoon, I was so busy with doing my paperwork about staff's salaries and seeing many clients.
After the worktime in my clinic, we visited the clinic in Seoul and met our franchise doctors.
We planned to start our seminar next month.
So, we checked the conference room and discussed the topic about the seminar.
I accepted to prepare the first lecture.
Anyway, because I drove my car in the night, I got more tired.
About the homework, I prefer the patient who listen to me well.
Of course, I have an exception.
As I said before, I like a foreigner who is talkative.
See you soon.

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Hi there, Dr. Kim!

You had another challenging day yesterday, a vey long one. While some people watch the clock tick, you spend your time like a whirwind being here and there. If I were you, I will be exhausted but fulfilled at the end of the day. You know I love being busy. However, I cannot compare my day to yours since I am not a doctor, rather, a sort of entertainer. Well, congratulations for executing your tasks to the best of your abilitites! Your new building is almost ready for occupancy and now your dreams are getting closer as the days go by. Share the kind of interior you will have in the new clinic in the next class discussion.

I wish you doctors well on your seminars. Taking the lead by bieng the first presenter is very brave, you are born to be a leader. It is best to set the presentations in an excellent way for them to follow that standard. Break a leg!

Some patients speak a lot while others are like sponges, they can listen and absorb much. Some just don't care, while others just want to ease their pain. Nonetheless, as a doctor, you want someone who pays attention when you speak and asks good questions as well. Patients' personalities vary as well,  you have to be ready to deal with any type.

Below are my grammar suggestions that you can analyze to make your writing even better. I know that you lack sleep and rest most of the time, yet, you still manage to compose this homework. With that, you are a top class student! Thank you very much.

See you then.

-T. Donna~

Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

I was so tired.
>> Correct!

There were a lot of works today.
>> There are a lot of (work/ tasks/ activities) today.

I should've slept early last night.
>> Correct!

As expected, it was so busy in the clinic today.
>> Correct!

At lunch time, Dr. MJ and I visited our new building and checked an interior progress.
>> At lunch time, Dr. MJ and I visited our new building and checked the interior progress.

It looked almost be done.
>> It looked almost done.

There were not any furniture and inner design, so I couldn't be satisfied with that.
>> Correct!

Maybe we can see the completed new clinic after one week.
>> Correct!

This afternoon, I was so busy with doing my paperwork about staff's salaries and seeing many clients.
>> This afternoon, I was so busy doing my paperwork about the staff's salaries and seeing many clients.

After the worktime in my clinic, we visited the clinic in Seoul and met our franchise doctors.
>> Correct!

We planned to start our seminar next month.
>> Correct!

So, we checked the conference room and discussed the topic about the seminar.
>> Correct!

I accepted to prepare the first lecture.
>> Correct!

Anyway, because I drove my car in the night, I got more tired.
>> Anyway, because I drove my car at the night, I got more tired.

About the homework, I prefer the patient who listen to me well.
>> About the homework, I prefer the patients who listen to me well.

Of course, I have an exception.
>> Correct!

As I said before, I like a foreigner who is talkative.
>> Correct!

See you soon.
>> Correct!
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