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Peace of the world

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Q. Do you think the world will have peace one day?

A. I think there are two points of view.
If the peace means "happy" of somebody who lives in the earth, I think the world will have peace. Or maybe the world alreay have peace.
Because the peace("happy") is very subjective and everyperson can find feeling of happy in their life.

But, the peace means "no economic problems", I think the world will never have peace one day. Because there is no end of the money things and there is no equality.

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Good job! I agree with you!!!!
>>> TEACHER JAMES 

Do you think the world will have peace one day?


A. I think there are two points of view.
If the peace means "happy" of somebody who lives in the earth, I think the world will have peace. Or maybe the world alreay have peace.
Because the peace("happy") is very subjective and everyperson can find feeling of happy in their life.
>>> I think there are two points of view.
If peace means "happy" to somebody who lives on earth, I think the world will have peace. Or maybe the world already has peace.
Because peace ("happy") is very subjective and every person can find a feeling of happiness in their life,


But, the peace means "no economic problems", I think the world will never have peace one day. Because there is no end of the money things and there is no equality.
>>> But if peace means "no economic problems,"  I think the world will never have peace one day. because there is no end to the money things and there is no equality.
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