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Why do some people collect things? Explain.

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First, people collect things to remind themselves of something, such as a trip, a family event, or important times. In my case, I have bought books relating to places, or buildings that I visited for some reason. Second, people collect things for personal accomplishments. For instance, one of my acquaintances collects fridge magnets of his visiting places or buildings and put them on the iron-made world map to point out what countries he visited. The world map also works as a good decoration in the living room. Lastly, people collect things to hand over to their close people like their children or friends. My parents collected commemorative coins for the Olympic game held in Korea because they believed their special coins would become more valuable than their original value someday. They are going to hand over the coins to their sons or grandchildren to help them financially.
What makes you collect things? Just begin to collect something from today. You can be inspired by it.

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Hi Steve!
Thank you for your composition today.
Take note of the corrections below.
I hope you learn from them and apply them in your daily studies.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
First, people collect things to remind themselves of something, such as a trip, a family event, or important times. 
>> Correct
In my case, I have bought books relating to places, or buildings that I visited for some reason. 
>> Correct
Second, people collect things for personal accomplishments. 
>> Correct
For instance, one of my acquaintances collects fridge magnets of his visiting places or buildings and put them on the iron-made world map to point out what countries he visited. 
>> For instance, one of my acquaintances collects fridge magnets from places or buildings he visited and put them on an iron-made world map to point out what countries he visited. 
The world map also works as a good decoration in the living room. 
>> Correct
Lastly, people collect things to hand over to their close people like their children or friends. 
>> Lastly, people collect things to hand over to people close to them like their children or friends. 
My parents collected commemorative coins for the Olympic game held in Korea because they believed their special coins would become more valuable than their original value someday. 
>> Correct
They are going to hand over the coins to their sons or grandchildren to help them financially.
>> Correct
What makes you collect things? 
>> Correct
Just begin to collect something from today. 
>> Correct
You can be inspired by it.
>> Correct
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