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Are thier any dangerous animal in your country?

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Yes. It is not common for them to come, but when park keepers come to trim the (snake's) bushes, they often bite those poor keepers. Seriously, those keepers didn't even know the snakes were there! You can say that snakes are selfish, if you want to. But the snakes were just trying to defend themselves, so we can't ACTUALLY blame them. And second, pigeons. It is incredibly rare for them to attack you, but if you try to 💀 them, they scratch and peck utill you get wounded seriously. And thier eyes are kind of red, so most people have fear... But anyways, they don't attack unless you attack(?) first, so it's OK. ^^🤗

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Hello Heather, good day. Thank you for doing your composition. Your ideas are amazing as always. Continue doing your homework to be able to express your ideas and boost your imagination.~ T. Lyn
Yes. It is not common for them to come, but when park keepers come to trim the (snake's) bushes, they often bite those poor keepers. 
>>It is not common for wild your dangerous animals to come, but when the park rangers trim the bushes, they often bite the poor ranger.
Seriously, those keepers didn't even know the snakes were there! 
>>Correct.
You can say that snakes are selfish, if you want to.
>>You can say that snakes are selfish.
But the snakes were just trying to defend themselves, so we can't ACTUALLY blame them. 
>>But we can't really blame the snakes because they are just trying to defend themselves.
And second, pigeons.
>>And second dangerous animal is a pigeon.
It is incredibly rare for them to attack you, but if you try to them, they scratch and peck utill you get wounded seriously. 
>>It is incredibly rare that they attack people, they will use their claws and beak until you are seriously hurt.
And thier eyes are kind of red, so most people have fear... 
>>And their eyes are bit red, which most people are afraid of.
But anyways, they don't attack unless you attack(?) first, so it's OK.
>>Anyways, pigeons don't attack unless you attack them first, so there is nothing to worry about.
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