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Q: What makes a happy home?
A: I think kind and honest family members and a clean house makes a happy home.
If the family members aren't kind, they won't feel good in their house, and also, if there aren't honest, they can't believe each other.
And usually, if the house isn't clean, then people don't feel good.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I think kind and honest family members and a clean house makes a happy home.

>> CORRECT!
If the family members aren't kind, they won't feel good in their house, and also, if there aren't honest, they can't believe each other.

>> If the family members aren't kind, they won't feel good in their house, and if they aren't honest, they can't believe each other.
And usually, if the house isn't clean, then people don't feel good.

>> Usually, if the house isn't clean, then people don't feel good.

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