¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Monday Homework

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ·ù*¿ì
2023-02-06 632

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Q: What makes a happy home?
A: I think kind and honest family members and a clean house makes a happy home.
If the family members aren't kind, they won't feel good in their house, and also, if there aren't honest, they can't believe each other.
And usually, if the house isn't clean, then people don't feel good.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I think kind and honest family members and a clean house makes a happy home.

>> CORRECT!
If the family members aren't kind, they won't feel good in their house, and also, if there aren't honest, they can't believe each other.

>> If the family members aren't kind, they won't feel good in their house, and if they aren't honest, they can't believe each other.
And usually, if the house isn't clean, then people don't feel good.

>> Usually, if the house isn't clean, then people don't feel good.

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
122189 Hi Gemmar ÀÌ*Áø ¿Ï·á 2022-09-06 1273
122188 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2022-09-06 1
122187 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-09-06 1311
122186 Caleb\'s Homework for September 05. ±Ç*È£ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-06 1349
122185 bad person ±Ç*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-06 1507
122184 Does any particular food bring back any special memories for you? ±è*°æ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-06 1375
122183 Homework: Create simple sentences using the following words ±è*¿í ¿Ï·á 2022-09-06 1023
122182 homework À±*¿ø ¿Ï·á 2022-09-06 1913
122181 Please use the expressions in a sentence: ¹Ú*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-06 951
122180 09.05.2022 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-06 1
122179 Which is heavier a cookie or a bowl? Which is lighter a pencil... ÀÓ*È£ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-06 0
122178 What is your most favourite vegetable and which do you like the... ÀÓ*È£ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-06 1230
122177 Homework Á¤*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-06 1753
122176 Homework Á¤*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-06 1201
122175 Weekend ±è*°æ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-06 1629
122174 What body language do you always use? ±è*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2022-09-06 1
122173 What is the best dish for you to eat when you¡¯re relaxing at... ±è*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-05 1456
122172 How to find someone with confidence. ±è*À± ¿Ï·á 2022-09-05 1153
122171 9/5 HOMEWORK ÀÌ*À¯ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-05 1421
122170 Homework ÀÌ*°æ ¿Ï·á 2022-09-05 1299

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04