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Homework from the Feedback (7)

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Q1. What are the benefits of working out?

A1. We can be healthy if we work out.

Q2. When and where is it best to work out?

A2. The best place to work out is the gym because there are many sport outfits.
The best time to work out is the afternoon (for winter) or the evening (for summer).

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Hi Geonha, 
Regular physical activity is one of the most important things you can do for your health. Being physically active can improve your brain health, help manage weight, reduce the risk of disease, strengthen bones and muscles, and improve your ability to do everyday activities. And if you're more focused on building upper-body strength and power, you'll probably get better results from training in the afternoon or evening. And for fat loss, it's better results for women who did morning workouts. ~ Teacher QUENNY

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Q1. What are the benefits of working out?
>>What are the benefits of working out? (CORRECT) 
A1. We can be healthy if we work out.
>>Work-out or exercise helps people keep a healthy weight and lower their risk of some diseases.
Q2. When and where is it best to work out?
>>When and where is it best to work out? (CORRECT) 
A2. The best place to work out is the gym because there are many sport outfits.
>>The best place to work out is at the gym because there are many exercises to work-out equipment. 
The best time to work out is the afternoon (for winter) or the evening (for summer).
>>The best time to work out is the afternoon in the winter season or the evening in the summer season. 
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Q1. What are the benefits of working out?

A1. We can be healthy if we work out.

Q2. When and where is it best to work out?

A2. The best place to work out is the gym because there are many sport outfits.
The best time to work out is the afternoon (for winter) or the evening (for summer).

















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