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Lot pf people succeed because of hard working. During the way to success there is so many opportunity. People can say that ''opportunity'' is luck, but it's not a luck that having ability to grab the opportunity and nailed it. If you want opportunity you have to work very very hard, so grabbing opportunity is result of effort. And succeed people don't do doing nothing and just waiting for opportunity that can change your life. They find their own opportunity. Even though it's little the found it and grab it. Only the one who is prepared can grab the opportunity. the prepared ones are very wise that they don't even use possibility of opportunity for their success.

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Hi Sophia!!! HAPPY FRIDAY! ^^ How are you doing? Well, I guess you're not really busy. Anyway, I see that you're writing output is improving day by day! Keep it up! See you later!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Lot pf people succeed because of hard working. 
>>> Lots of people succeed because of hard working. 
During the way to success there is so many opportunity. 
>>> Along the way to success there are so many opportunities. 
People can say that ''opportunity'' is a luck, but it's not a luck having the ability to grab the opportunity and nailed it.
>>> CORRECT!
 If you want opportunity you have to work very very hard, so grabbing opportunity is result of effort.
>>>  If you want an opportunity you have to work extra hard, so grabbing opportunity is the result of giving effort.
 And succeed people don't do doing nothing and just waiting for opportunity that can change your life.
>>>  And successful people don't do nothing and just wait for opportunity that can change their life.
 They find their own opportunity. 
>>> CORRECT!
Even though it's little the found it and grab it.
>>> Even though it's little but they found it and grab it.
 Only the one who is prepared can grab the opportunity. 
>>> CORRECT!
The prepared ones are very wise that they don't even use possibility of opportunity for their success.
>>> CORRECT!
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