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Why is it difficult for some people to say sorry?

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I think it's because some people is selfish. They grown selfish or they didn't experience of sorry for. When some people were young, their parents didn't educate about manner. But I think not some people but most of people don't have manner. It's because I saw a lot of people that they don't have manner, so they never said thank you and sorry. So many people don't have some manner little by little.

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Hi, Daisy. ^^
Thank you for answering this essay question. I agree that most people these days don't have good manners. 
It is true that learning good manners starts at home and it is mainly the responsibility of the parents to teach it to their children. 
Anyhow, I hope you're having a great day. 
See you in class later. ^^
~Teacher Charry

I think it's because some people is selfish. 
>> I think it's because some people are selfish. 
They grown selfish or they didn't experience of sorry for. 
>> They have grown selfish or they haven't experienced anything that they should be sorry for.
When some people were young, their parents didn't educate about manner. 
>> When they were young, their parents didn't educate them about good manners. 
But I think not some people but most of people don't have manner. 
>> But I think  most people don't have manners and not just a few. 
It's because I saw a lot of people that they don't have manner, so they never said thank you and sorry. 
>> It's because I saw a lot of people who don't have good manners. They never said thank you and sorry. 
So many people don't have some manner little by little.
>>  [Do you mean]: So many people lose their good manners little by little. 
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