¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Homework

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±è*¿ì
2023-02-02 747

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Hello.
As you can expected, I had a hectic day.
I taught Dr. Bae all day as if mother did that to her baby.
He was so enthusiastic, thus I couldn't stand but explain to him with my best.
During the work time, I could talk with him for a long time, and I realized that he is a real good man.
He was polite, gentle, and kind.
He appreciated me many times.
So, how could I teach him without my best?
He learned many know-how from me.
After my work, I was totally exhausted.
And then, as soon as I came home, I longed for my whiskey.
Hence, I drank a three glasses of whiskey.
In fact, I wanted more, though.
Because I should work tomorrow with my best condition, I endured it.
About my homework, I like my personality basically.
I think I sometimes shared other's emotion too much.
Dr. MJ don't understand me about it, and he even think that it is bad to empathize other's emotion too much.
But, I like to share people's mind and emotion.
And sometime it make me think that I am a human.
See you soon.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Good moring, Dr. Kim!

Hectic days are a gift. They make you stronger, better in your professioin, and richer in experince. Dr. Bae is lucky to learn from you. You are both kind doctors. This characted of beiing kind makes you empathize to your patients well and it makes them feel comfortable and safe when they get their treatments from you. 

Meanwhile, whisky has been your evening bestfriend. Always take it in with some food in your stomach. Just like yesterday, you apoke much in class with candidness, sympathy and empathy, and vivid descriptions. I like these most about your speech. Here n your writing, it is pretty much the same. 

Now, some are sympathetic or empathetic. Others have less of these. So, I think that you and Dr. M.J. are the opposite kinds. You balance each other's energies well and this is good in business. 

Go over my suggestions below in some of your sentences. Your consistency is very high and you always incorporate my suggestions to your speech and writing. With these, excellent job once again!

Have a wonderful day!

-T. Donna~

Hello.
>> Correct!

As you can expected, I had a hectic day.
>> As  expected, I had a hectic day.
Or: As I expected, it was a hectic day.

I taught Dr. Bae all day as if mother did that to her baby.
>>  I taught Dr. Bae all day as if a mother did that to her baby.

He was so enthusiastic, thus I couldn't stand but explain to him with my best.
>> Correct!

During the work time, I could talk with him for a long time, and I realized that he is a real good man.
>> Correct!

He was polite, gentle, and kind.
>> Correct!

He appreciated me many times.
>> Correct!

So, how could I teach him without my best?
>> Correct!

He learned many know-how from me.
>> Correct!

After my work, I was totally exhausted.
>> Correct!

And then, as soon as I came home, I longed for my whiskey.
>> Correct!

Hence, I drank a three glasses of whiskey.
>> Hence, I drank three glasses of whiskey.

In fact, I wanted more, though.
>> Correct!

Because I should work tomorrow with my best condition, I endured it.
>> Correct!

About my homework, I like my personality basically.
>> Correct!

I think I sometimes shared other's emotion too much.
>> Correct!

Dr. MJ don't understand me about it, and he even think that it is bad to empathize other's emotion too much.
>> Dr. MJ doesn't understand  it, and he even thinks that it is bad to empathize to other's emotion too much.

But, I like to share people's mind and emotion.
>> Correct!

And sometime it make me think that I am a human.
>> And sometimes, it makes me think that I am human.

See you soon.
>> Correct!
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
128015 5/4 homework ÃÖ*º½ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-04 796
128014 Homework Àå*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-04 1
128013 homework 05.04 ÃÖ*Ç ¿Ï·á 2023-05-04 578
128012 What are popular small businesses in your country? ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2023-05-04 1120
128011 homework ½Å*ÈÖ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-04 948
128010 What\'s your thought on the saying, \"One for all, all for... ±è*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2023-05-04 4
128009 What do you like the most about Children\'s Day? ¾Ù* ¿Ï·á 2023-05-04 1
128008 Homework ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2023-05-04 888
128007 Thursday homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-05-04 876
128006 Homework ±è*¼÷ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-04 935
128005 Who could help you most when you encounter problems... ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-04 980
128004 What should you keep in mind when studying English? ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-04 970
128003 How has dropping a line become easy with technology? ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-04 928
128002 Homework ÇÔ*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-04 1
128001 In the bank ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-04 2
128000 Do you think we should still invest in rocket launches,... ÀÌ*¾Æ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-04 769
127999 workplace ±Ç*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-04 1065
127998 May ±Ç*ÀÏ ÁøÇàÁß 2023-05-04 0
127997 Most important goal of Education ¾ç*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2023-05-04 898
127996 Where did you spend your last vacation? ±Ç*Áø ¿Ï·á 2023-05-04 2

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04