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There is a difference between hope and fact.
Many man want a woman who has inner beauty.
But they choose a woman who has outside beauty.
I think It¡¯s difficult for pretty woman to have inner beauty.
They are easily arrogant and selfish.
Because they already know how beautiful they are.
People who are over 50years old realize
the importance of inner beauty.

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Happy Thursday, Ms. Sunny!
You have elaborated your opinion on this homework which I truly appreciate. It is rare to find a woman who possess both beauty inside and out.
Have a great day!
Aki~
There is a difference between hope and fact.
>>> CORRECT!

Many man want a woman who has inner beauty.
>>> Many men want a woman who has inner beauty.

But they choose a woman who has outside beauty.
>>> CORRECT!

I think It¡¯s difficult for pretty woman to have inner beauty.
>>> I think It¡¯s difficult for a pretty woman to have inner beauty.

They are easily arrogant and selfish.
>>> They easily become arrogant and selfish.

Because they already know how beautiful they are.
>>> Because they already knew how beautiful they are.

People who are over 50 years old realize the importance of inner beauty.
>>> CORRECT!

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