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Q1. When did you last have an argument with someone?

A1. I had an argument with my parents because they slept for a long time without preparing the meal.

Q2. Why is it important to apologize?

A2. It is important to apologize because the relationship can be broken easily if we do something wrong and don't apologize.

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Hi Geonha, 
Apologizing is a chance for you to be honest, humble, and act with integrity. And to truly heal a relationship, it is powerful for people to exchange apologies. Each person acknowledges their responsibility, they reach a shared definition of the harmful behaviors committed by each one, they are both truly sorry, and they create a plan to avoid future misunderstandings. ~ Teacher QUENNY 
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Q1. When did you last have an argument with someone?
>> When did you last have an argument with someone?(CORRECT) 
A1. I had an argument with my parents because they slept for a long time without preparing the meal.
>> I had an argument with my parents because they slept for a long time without preparing the meal.(CORRECT) 
Q2. Why is it important to apologize?
>> Why is it important to apologize?(CORRECT)
A2. It is important to apologize because the relationship can be broken easily if we do something wrong and don't apologize.
>>  It is important to apologize because the relationship can be broken easily if we do something wrong and don't apologize. (CORRECT) 

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Q1. When did you last have an argument with someone?

A1. I had an argument with my parents because they slept for a long time without preparing the meal.

Q2. Why is it important to apologize?

A2. It is important to apologize because the relationship can be broken easily if we do something wrong and don't apologize.
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