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Hello ~ Teacher,

Thank teacher for your advice.
So, I asked power English Korea office.
I know when I used writing site.
Sorry, I'm old women and not good idea.

I visited church after a long time. Because COVID19.
How about teacher country?

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Good evening, Jini! ^^,)

Thank you for this composition.
I thoroughly read it and made some corrections.

Most restrictions here in my country have already been lifted. People can go to church, the mall, the park, and other establishments with minimal COVID-19 guidelines.

I will talk to you again on Thursday. Have a good night!

__T. Mayleen :)


Hello ~ Teacher,
>>> Hello, Teacher!

Thank teacher for your advice.
>>> Teacher, thank you for your advice.
So, I asked power English Korea office.

I know when I used writing site.
>>> I called the Korean office, and now I know where to submit my composition on the website.
Sorry, I'm old women and not good idea.
>>> I'm sorry that I already old to know things like this.

I visited church after a long time. Because COVID19.
>>> I visited the church after a long time that I wasn't able to because of COVID-19.
>>> OR: I finally went to the church after a long absence due to COVID-19.
How about teacher country?
>>> How is the situation in your country, teacher?
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