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Women should go to military.

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2023-01-30 2066

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South Korea is still in the war. North Korea has so powerful weapon. As military is shrinking we have to pay more to USA military. And that coast a lot. So i think it's so much better that women go to the military like men. But it will be difficult to replace the military space.
New training places, bathrooms, bedrooms..... It will coast a lot either. Also their going to have problem between men and women. Such as arguments about women's training level, sexual assault, sexual harassment. So if we're going to let women to go military, than we have to prepare a lot.

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Hi Sophia! I can't imagine you wearing a military uniform fighting against North Korea. Well, anyway with the population you have now, there maybe possibilities that you ladies would also be joining the military someday. I just hope the majority will be positive on that. Hahaha!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
South Korea is still in the war. 
>>> South Korea is still in war. 
North Korea has so powerful weapon.
>>> CORRECT
 As military is shrinking we have to pay more to the USA military. 
>>> CORRECT
And that coast a lot. 
>>> And that costs a lot. 
So, I think it's so much better that women go to the military like men. 
>>> CORRECT
But it will be difficult to replace the military space.
>>> CORRECT
New training places, bathrooms, bedrooms It will coast a lot either.
>>> New training places, bathrooms, bedrooms - they  will cost a lot either.
 Also their going to have problem between men and women. 
>>>  Moreover, they're going to have problems between men and women. 
Such as arguments about women's training level, sexual assault, sexual harassment. 
>>> CORRECT
So if we're going to let women to go military, than we have to prepare a lot.
>>> So if we're going to let the women go to the military, then we have to prepare a lot.
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