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I feel tired when I don't get enough sleep.
Also, after I finish operations which take a long time, I'm very exhausted.
In that case, I used to get a short nap for about one hour because I don't focus on my job.
After taking a nap, I could concentrate on finishing my to-do-lists effectively with refreshed mind.
However, if there is another urgent situation to complete in a minute, I couldn't have time to rest or take a nap.
Then, I'm very irritated.
Even though it is minor mistakes that I could understand on the other day, I might feel annoyed about that when I'm tired.

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Hi there, Dr. Stella!

A nap or dozing off can be very beneficial to reset our thoughts and stay focused in our jobs. In the medical field, you have to stay alert and focused all the time. So getting a very good rest for you is a must.

Well, below are combinations of simple sentences to complex ones and I am glad to see that you know how to use them effectively and afficiently in your composition.

Study my suggestions carefully. Excellent job!

Have a happy weekend!

-T. Donna~

I feel tired when I don't get enough sleep.
>> Correct!

Also, after I finish operations which take a long time, I'm very exhausted.
>> Correct!

In that case, I used to get a short nap for about one hour because I don't focus on my job.
>> In that case, I used to get a short nap for about one hour because I can't focus on my job.

After taking a nap, I could concentrate on finishing my to-do-lists effectively with refreshed mind.
>> After taking a nap, I could concentrate on finishing my to-do-lists effectively with a refreshed mind.

However, if there is another urgent situation to complete in a minute, I couldn't have time to rest or take a nap.
>> Correct!

Then, I'm very irritated.
>> Correct!

Even though it is minor mistakes that I could understand on the other day, I might feel annoyed about that when I'm tired.
>> Even though there are minor mistakes that I could understand on an ordinary day, I might feel annoyed about that when I'm tired.

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