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Hello, T.Donna.
I am home.
As I told you, I took a bus on my way to work, and after work, I took a bus again on my way to home.
I actually took a bus after a long time, and it was not bad.
It took only about 25minutes to get to work from my house, and it is almost similar to drive by myself.
Because I have a plan to meet my friends and drink together Tomorrow evening, I consider taking a bus again Tomorrow morning.
I was a little disappointed that I didn't meet any foreign clients these days, so I really hope that I can meet a foreigner tomorrow; of course, who speaks English.
At lunch time, there were some educations about a good skin treatment.
It was about a novel medicine for skin use and Dr. MJ and I thought that we can get both good result and income with it.
Thus, we will make a protocol for the treatment and apply it to our clinic at least next week.
I think we can remember something easily if it is strong and impressive, whether it is good or not.
What do you say?
See you.

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Good evening, Dr. Kim!

For a change, you can sit back, relax and take the bus. It can save you a lot of energy and relax sometimes from the hustle and bustle of everyday traffic. Well, it is also a lot cheaper, isn't it? Whichever suites you and more convenient  for you, then public transport is not bad at all.

Perhaps the foreign clients are also feeling very cold at this point in time. When the chill will subside, many of them will start to flock into your clinic for their beauty treatments. For now, you have to be patient. So, updating your equipment and clinic staff are the best ways to be ready for massive patients.

Remembering greatly depens on us sometimes. Our memories can be very sharp and can recall both good or bad memories. We can control what we want to be left to us while creating new ones as well.

Please read and analyze my suggestions below. Most of my suggestions have to do with verbs as well as the subject-verb agreements. You have done a wonderful job! Thank you very much once again!

-T. Donna~

Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

I am home.
>> Correct!

As I told you, I took a bus on my way to work, and after work, I took a bus again on my way to home.
>> As I told you, I took a bus on my way to work, and after work, I took a bus again on my way home.

I actually took a bus after a long time, and it was not bad.
>> Correct!

It took only about 25minutes to get to work from my house, and it is almost similar to drive by myself.
>> Correct!
Or: It took only about 25minutes to get to work from my house, and it is almost similar when I drive.

Because I have a plan to meet my friends and drink together Tomorrow evening, I consider taking a bus again Tomorrow morning.
>> Because I have a plan to meet my friends and drink together tomorrow evening, I am consider taking a bus again tomorrow morning.

I was a little disappointed that I didn't meet any foreign clients these days, so I really hope that I can meet a foreigner tomorrow; of course, who speaks English.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!

At lunch time, there were some educations about a good skin treatment.
>> At lunch time, there were some education about good skin treatment.

It was about a novel medicine for skin use and Dr. MJ and I thought that we can get both good result and income with it.
>> It was about a novel medicine for skin use and Dr. MJ and I thought that we can get both good results and income with it.

Thus, we will make a protocol for the treatment and apply it to our clinic at least next week.
>> Correct!

I think we can remember something easily if it is strong and impressive, whether it is good or not.
>> Correct!

What do you say?
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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