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Hello, T.Donna.
You know what?
Today is the coldest day in this winter.
Even though I worked inside the building, my feet almost freezed.
As expected, there were many patients in the clinic today.
However, I was a little disappointed because today's income was not really good.
Maybe, it's too cold to use a money for beauty.
Today's homework is about my memory.
I think I have a good memory for short-term.
In my school age, I studied hard just one day before the test, and I could have a good score always.
But, I can't remember old things.
Sometimes, I am so surprised if I can't recall a simple thing.
My ability to remember has evolved for just one side, I suppose.
I wonder if you have experienced the change of memory.
At times, some memories have changed in my brain completely.
It may be the result from some defensive mechanisms.
Meanwhile, I think that forgetting is the best present from God.
Without forgetting bad events, we can't live happily.
Do you agree with this?
See you tomorrow.

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Hi there, Dr. Kim!

I agree that yesterday was the coldest day of the year. If there could any be any cooler day than yesterday, my smile in the morning will start to crack in
class soon. ^^ Well, people are also trying to consider their options lately regarding going our and battling the chill or being beautiful.

Now, the gift of memory has been one of the greatest features of mankind. By it, we can use history never to repeat the same mistakes. Also, we can rectify
our wrong doings using these memory. Truly, the gift of forgiveness or erasing bad memories in our minds and hearts are crucial in our lives. We
cannot move on holding grudges. We need to bury the hatchet and continue making good memories. Thanks for answering the homework question adequately.

Hence, kindly go over the suggestions below. Some of them were underlined while some were deleted. I am glad that your English memory is sharp
and accurate always. I am grateful for your answers always.

See you in class!

-T. Donna~


Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

You know what?
>> Correct!

Today is the coldest day in this winter.
>> Today is the coldest day of winter.

Even though I worked inside the building, my feet almost freezed.
>> 
Even though I worked inside the building, my feet almost froze.

As expected, there were many patients in the clinic today.
>> Correct!

However, I was a little disappointed because today's income was not really good.
>> Correct!

Maybe, it's too cold to use a money for beauty.
>> 
Maybe, it's too cold to use money for beauty.

Today's homework is about my memory.
>> Correct!

I think I have a good memory for short-term.
>> Correct!

In my school age, I studied hard just one day before the test, and I could have a good score always.
>> During
 my younger school age, I studied hard just one day before the test, and I could have good scores always.

But, I can't remember old things.
>> Correct!

Sometimes, I am so surprised if I can't recall a simple thing.
>> Correct!

My ability to remember has evolved for just one side, I suppose.
>> Correct!

I wonder if you have experienced the change of memory.
>> Correct!

At times, some memories have changed in my brain completely.
>> Correct!

It may be the result from some defensive mechanisms.
>> 
It may be the result of some defensive mechanisms.

Meanwhile, I think that forgetting is the best present from God.
>> Correct!

Without forgetting bad events, we can't live happily.
>> Correct!

Do you agree with this?
>> Correct!

See you tomorrow.
>> Correct!
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