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Why do you think people are afraid of getting old?

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People are afraid of being dead. It means that getting old is close to die. However, average lifespan has increased due to the development of medical technology. We used to be only interested in lifespan but we care quality of life while we are living a lot these days. Aging is already become a serious social problem, so we have disscussed about various ways to live healthier. Government has to show proper measure how people live without financial and health problem. Although, there are a lot of virus around us that can't be protected, we belive that it is not a serious disease that can't be cured. If we can live without any disease, there are numerous things we can do. Some people try to find the places on the planet because they want to find other places to live, if there is a tragedy on the earth.
It might be the human's natural desire but I think that we have to follow the way of nature which means humans die if they were born in.

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Good day, Sir Hwang!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

People are afraid of being dead. 
>> CORRECT! 
OR >> People are afraid of death.
It means that getting old is close to die. 
>> It means that getting old is close to death. 
However, average lifespan has increased due to the development of medical technology. 
>> CORRECT! 
We used to be only interested in lifespan but we care quality of life while we are living a lot these days.
>> CORRECT! 
Aging is already become a serious social problem, so we have disscussed about various ways to live healthier. 
>> Aging has already become a serious social problem, so we have discussed about various ways to live healthier. 
Government has to show proper measure how people live without financial and health problem.
>> CORRECT! 
Although, there are a lot of virus around us that can't be protected, we belive that it is not a serious disease that can't be cured. 
>> Although, there are a lot of virus around us that can't be protected, we believe that it is not a serious disease that can't be cured. 
If we can live without any disease, there are numerous things we can do. 
>> CORRECT! 
Some people try to find the places on the planet because they want to find other places to live, if there is a tragedy on the earth.
>> CORRECT! 
It might be the human's natural desire but I think that we have to follow the way of nature which means humans die if they were born in.
>> CORRECT! 

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