¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Homework

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±è*¿ì
2023-01-24 639

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Hi, there.
I am in the middle of resting as yesterday.
As you know, my brother's family came to my home last Saturday.
They stayed until Sunday and we had a great time.
Especially, my brother and I went to a Karaoke to sing a song for about 4 hours.
My brother loves singing.
We found that each of us got better than before for singing and it made us feel good.
Someday, I want to sing a song with my brother in the big stage.
Last Saturday, my family and I went to my wife's parents' house which is located in Jeon Ju city.
It took about 4 hours to get there, so my wife and I drove the car in turns.
We met wife's parents, second sister, his husband, and their two sons.
The brother-in-law loves alcohol just like me, so we enjoyed wiskey with grilled beef there.
After dinner, we took a walk and went to a Karaoke; He really loves singing as well.
Yesterday, I took a rest all day, and we came back home in the night.
I don't like a private education, but I can't deny the need of it.
See you.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hello, Dr. Kim!

I am sure that you had a big blast during Seolnal singing your hearts out with your brother and  your sister's brother-in-law. The Lunar New Year is one of the most anticipated celebrations after all. So, singing at the top of your lungs is very suited to the celebration. Well, I and my son sang as well with the karaoke under the tree. In the Philippines, we can rent one and bring it to a location. We traveled four hours as well last Saturday to see my 94 years old grandmother. What a very long journey!

Getting better in singing means more confidence in your technique especially in reaching high notes and putting the correct emotion in a song. There will be a chance to sing with your brother someday and that would be something worth looking forward to. For now, practicing with your brothers is your chance to practice and in your BMW. 

I am  certain that your energy will be so high when I see you tomorrow since you have done super fun activities as well as  memorable ones.

The most grammar comments I made were about prepositions (in, in, etc.) as well as spelling of words, and subject-verb agreement. Kindly read them below and analyze the structures. 

Good night and see you tomorrow!

-T. Donna~

Hi, there.
>>Hi there!

I am in the middle of resting as yesterday.
>> Correct!

As you know, my brother's family came to my home last Saturday.
>> Correct!

They stayed until Sunday and we had a great time.
>> Correct!

Especially, my brother and I went to a Karaoke to sing a song for about 4 hours.
>> Especially, my brother and I went to a Karaoke to sing songs for about 4 hours.
Or: 4 -> four 

My brother loves singing.
>> Correct!

We found that each of us got better than before for singing and it made us feel good.
>> We found out that each of us got better than before in singing and it made us feel good.

Someday, I want to sing a song with my brother in the big stage.
>> Someday, I want to sing a song with my brother on the big stage.

Last Saturday, my family and I went to my wife's parents' house which is located in Jeon Ju city.
>> Correct!

It took about 4 hours to get there, so my wife and I drove the car in turns.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!
Or: 4 -> four
 
We met wife's parents, second sister, his husband, and their two sons.
>> We met my wife's parents, her second sister, her sister's husband, and their two sons.

The brother-in-law loves alcohol just like me, so we enjoyed wiskey with grilled beef there.
>> Correct!
Or: whiskey
 

After dinner, we took a walk and went to a Karaoke; He really loves singing as well.
>> After dinner, we took a walk and went to a Karaoke; he really loves singing as well.

Yesterday, I took a rest all day, and we came back home in the night.
>> Yesterday, I took a rest all day, and we came back home at night.

I don't like a private education, but I can't deny the need of it.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
125343 Homework ÀÌ*°æ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-05 572
125342 When are secrets a good thing? Why? ±¸*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-02-05 598
125341 Why do you think it\'s difficult for people to talk about... ±¸*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-02-05 757
125340 homework ÃÖ*Ç ¿Ï·á 2023-02-05 525
125339 Have you ever complained about the food or service in a... ±è*±¹ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-04 1
125338 Do you sometimes find it easy to make alternatives when there... ±è*±¹ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-04 3
125337 How do people fall in love? ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2023-02-04 554
125336 2023-2/3 HOMEWORK ÀÌ*À¯ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-03 520
125335 Lesson 5 : Homework ±è*Çý ¿Ï·á 2023-02-03 504
125334 Why we have to use store ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-02-03 0
125333 There are four kinds of people ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-02-03 0
125332 Why do some people like eating out? ±è*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2023-02-03 2
125331 What did you realize after all the preparations you have made as... ·ù*¼± ¿Ï·á 2023-02-03 522
125330 HOMEWORK È«*¼± ¿Ï·á 2023-02-03 498
125329 homework Á¤*È£ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-03 3
125328 What is you phobia and why? ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2023-02-03 534
125327 homework Á¤*È£ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-03 0
125326 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2023-02-03 1
125325 Friday homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-02-03 487
125324 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2023-02-03 0

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04