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Yes. I think people who exercise will be happier. Because when you exercise, you feel refreshed because you've been active. And you will be healthier and live longer. Moderate exercise is necessary for our body.

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Hello, Sheila! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next class! :)

~ Teacher Tricia

Yes. I think people who exercise will be happier. 
>>> CORRECT!

Because when you exercise, you feel refreshed because you've been active.
>>> CORRECT!

And you will be healthier and live longer. 
>>> CORRECT!

Moderate exercise is necessary for our body.
>>> Moderate exercise is necessary for our bodies.
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