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Two siblings of my mother have stayed in Japan.
My uncle have lived in Osaka for 20 years, because he run a business there.
My aunt have lived in Tokyo for more than 40 years after she married Japanese.
Japan is relatively closer from Korea than other countries, but it's not easy to have chances to meet them because I don't have enough time to reserve and get on a flight to Japan.
Especially because of COVID-19, it has been more difficult to visit forein countries for 3 years.
I miss them so much and hope to see them in person soon.

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Good day once again, Dr. Stella!

It seems that many of your family members fell inlove with Japan and the people there, the reason for their migration and why you have not  seen them for decades. Well, it is all part of growth and change. Even if they are a million miles away, you will always be connected by blood and love, and also all the precious memories that you had in the past.

For my grammar suggestions I have below, they are focused on the subject-verb agreement primarily. Make sure that a single verbs precedes a singular verb. In addition, the rest are about spelling and spelling out numbers below ten. Nevertheless, you have done an excellent piece of writing here. Carry on!

See you on your next composition!

-T. Donna~

Two siblings of my mother have stayed in Japan.
>> Correct!

My uncle have lived in Osaka for 20 years, because he run a business there.
>> My uncle (has lived/ has been  living) in Osaka for 20 years because he runs a business there.
 
My aunt have lived in Tokyo for more than 40 years after she married Japanese.
>> My aunt (has lived/ has been  living) in Tokyo for more than 40 years after she married a Japanese.

Japan is relatively closer from Korea than other countries, but it's not easy to have chances to meet them because I don't have enough time to reserve and get on a flight to Japan.
>> Correct!
Or: 
Japan is relatively closer from Korea than other countries, but it's not easy to have chances to meet them because I don't have enough time to reserve and get on a flight to that country.

Especially because of COVID-19, it has been more difficult to visit forein countries for 3 years.
>> Correct!
Or: B
ecause of COVID-19 especially, it has been more difficult to visit foreign countries for three years.

I miss them so much and hope to see them in person soon.
>> Correct!
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